Rewriting my works helped me understand in which areas I need to improve on, and which areas in writing I have more skills in. It was challenging, as I get frustrated with myself quite easily, and also tend to give up quickly. However, the constant personal feedback from my teacher helped immensely, and encouraged me to work on areas I need to improve.
For example, after going over my Memorial essay in class, I felt the sudden drive, and motivation to re-write certain parts of the essay. I felt the motivation to improve, for both a better grade, but also for my personal satisfaction. This is a feeling, I don’t often have.
An example of a piece I rewrote numerous times was the Catalog Text for my Memorial Project. The original writing felt weak, and I had a hard time getting my idea across without sounding ‘cheesy’. I felt unhappy with the first grades I received for the Text, but my teacher constantly put down more comments on canvas to help me produce a stronger piece of writing. My third paragraph was considered weak, as I described the way my Memorial looks physically, rather than what my choice of materials, etc represent.
The original paragraph:
The memorial is represented as a black helmet attached to a black rope, with a wooden board between the top of the rope and the helmet. The memorial is therefore simple, yet dark. The memorial almost looks as if it is misplaced; one can tell by merely viewing the memorial that it does not fit into its location. As the helmet is attached to a branch (or street light) above a road, the memorial cannot be too distracting for those driving, biking, or walking. The color of the memorial is therefore black. The lack of color will also evoke certain emotions in those viewing the piece close-up or further away.
Final paragraph:
I made the decision to make my piece lack of color in order to evoke certain emotions when viewing the piece close-up or further away. The shade black is often associated with moods related to death, fear, and mystery, as it has an overall negative connotation. I have chosen to make this piece as simple as possible when it comes to the lack of color, and the minimal materials used.
I read the teacher’s constructive criticism, and altered my writing according to her comments. As a result, I was able to create a stronger paragraph, which I was content to put in the Memorial booklet (which viewers looked at during the class exhibition). I was also content when receiving an improved grade for the final text. Thus, I have learned the importance of the process of rewriting. I have learned to actually enjoy it.
