Bridge 1: I Remember Seminar Reflection

From my first draft to my second draft, I have used the add, subtract and move techniques. The add technique make the sentence more precise and the viewer would get a better sense and image of the particular memory that I want to show. For example: At first, I wrote having all kinds of dishes on the table and I change it to having all kinds of dishes cover the entire table. I used the moving technique to fluent the sentence. For example: “I remember how the morning smell of the grass with dewdrops.” I changed it to” I remember the smell of the grass with dewdrops in the morning.” I found out that it is better to describe something precisely, so the viewers get a really clear sense of what you are writing.

 

From my second draft to the third draft, I used add, subtract and move. “I remember eating with my other family member” this sentence is not precise enough so I change it to “I remember eating with my other family member” I used subtract to get away the wrong punctuation.

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