First draft
I remember I went to Beijing but didn’t go to the great wall, because my grandfather went to emergency of hospital.
I remember each smell of fragrances.
I remember I got call from the office because I didn’t do anything in my math class.
I remember I cried because my aunt told me not to eat because I was over weight.
I remember the grape corridor in my elementary school.
I remember I finished my level tenth certification of piano when I was fourteen.
I remember my mother divorce twice.
I remember the last time I saw my dad.
I remember the biggest fight with my grandmother.
I remember hot pot.
I remember the first hamburger came out from McDonald.
I remember I was bullying a pig with fire work.
I remember my first puppy die.
Final draft
I remember I went to Beijing but didn’t go to the great wall, because my grandfather went to emergency of hospital.
I remember each smell of fragrances.
I remember I got call from the office because I didn’t do anything in my math class.
I remember I cried because my aunt told me not to eat because I was over weight.
I remember the grape corridor in my elementary school.
I remember I finished my level tenth certification of piano when I was fourteen.
I remember my mother divorce twice.
I remember the last time I saw my dad.
I remember the biggest fight with my grandmother.
I remember hot pot.
I remember the first hamburger came out from McDonald.
I remember I was bullying a pig with fire work.
I remember my first puppy die.
I remember who was the first person tell me “ I love you”.
I remember I play dinosaurs toys with my cousin.
I remember the day my mom move to United States.
I remember how excited I was when the first time my mom came back from United States.
I remember I cried everyday when my mom leave in the morning to the work.
I remember I cried, because I didn’t want to go the school.
I remember I the feeling of missing my grandmother.
I remember I cried, because my grandmother didn’t buy me the toy that I want.
I remember my each birthdays.
I remember my first necklace.
I remember the day that my sister born.
I remember my first boyfriend.
I remember I much that I used to love chocolate.
I remember I was very fat.
I remember I was very sick and stay in hospital for two months.
I remember my graduation, and I was beautiful.
I remember the movement that I got the accepted letter from Parsons.
I remember I was placing into 1600 for ESL.
I remember how happy I was when I transfer from 1600 to 1700.
I remember today and yesterday.
I remember Each important movement in my life.
I remember her name , his name, and my name.
I remember you and her and him..
I remember myself.
I remember what I remember.
Reflection:
After I did the first draft and my partner did my peer editing. I recognized that my draft was too short, and some of contexts were not make sense. Therefore, I fixed some sentences, and add more contexts about my deep memory in it. Overall, I finished my final draft. I think is good, but not perfect. It has more elements can add on, and the memory can be more deeper and deeper.